When They See Us
Below is my practice representation essay which I wrote strictly under 45mins:
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Hi Priscilla
ReplyDeleteOverall Score: 39/50
Terminology: 7/10
Argument / Analysis: 16/20
Examples: 16/20
O dear, I can just tell you would have so many other great points but time is such a huge factor! Keep practising with the 45 min time limit so you're getting an accurate representation of how well you'll do in the exam. practise writing fast!
This time limit will mean you have to choose very carefully and strategically what you'll include in your essay. Practise getting ALL 4 tech areas mentioned in some way and jamming it full of examples.
Your essay is great, it just feels like you didn't get a great amount of your notes in there.
Your argument was strong though and that came across well in each paragraph. I like that you referred to what you're seeing in the light of the bigger picture of who was being represented. You didn't just talk about the boys in suits, you linked that to the fact that it was like they were being tried as adults. Some really great thoughts there.